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I posted it up ages ago..and only two people commented on it after I spent ages writing it D: I've started to write a second part to it and that's already up to three pages in a word doc, but please leave me feedback, ideas that you may have that I can/could include into it, and any thoughts you have on the characters, the story so far Just general feedback.

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I posted a journal the other day asking for who was active and who wasn't...I know I don't post a lot up anymore but I'm busy with college etc and work, so the most you could do for now is comment on this since it still only has two comments after two days, and LOADS more people have looked at it since I posted this. I am working on drawing but it's going really slowly. So far 9 people have read this journal today, and nothings happened.  I know it's long...but it wont take over an hour to read it :/ only around 5 mins at the most.